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ARGH! I hate it!
Apr. 2nd, 2004 02:29 amI have been working all night on this stupid script trying to get it down to 15 pages. I finally got it there, but it left my script battered and bleeding. I used to love this script so much, and now I just hate it. I'm not happy with this draft at all... especially since all the comments I've gotten from teachers (who knew it was too long at 18 pages) were to keep making it longer!
Three of the characters now really don't have anything to say. They just kinda do stuff or stand around. And I can't eliminate them entirely... it's just that they're suddenly mute.
I think I managed to eliminate all but 3 jokes, which is not what you want to do in a comedy.
I'm just bored with it now. :P Of course, I have all summer to tweak it (and I can always shoot a longer script than I submit to the teachers-- Shh! It's a secret!), but I wanted this version to just be awesome so I could win one of the narrative awards.
Plus, I can't even talk about it with my instructor, because he wants me to make one of the lead characters a girl... which is SO out of the question.
I hope my frustration is due mostly to tiredness rather than it actually sucking as much as I fear.
Anyway, please, please, please... I know most of you guys are just excellent, excellent writers... so if you have the time, would you mind reading over my script and giving me suggestions? It takes place in a comic book store, where two employees try to play God with the emotions of their customers. Just drop me a comment and I'll e-mail it to you.
Thanks!
Three of the characters now really don't have anything to say. They just kinda do stuff or stand around. And I can't eliminate them entirely... it's just that they're suddenly mute.
I think I managed to eliminate all but 3 jokes, which is not what you want to do in a comedy.
I'm just bored with it now. :P Of course, I have all summer to tweak it (and I can always shoot a longer script than I submit to the teachers-- Shh! It's a secret!), but I wanted this version to just be awesome so I could win one of the narrative awards.
Plus, I can't even talk about it with my instructor, because he wants me to make one of the lead characters a girl... which is SO out of the question.
I hope my frustration is due mostly to tiredness rather than it actually sucking as much as I fear.
Anyway, please, please, please... I know most of you guys are just excellent, excellent writers... so if you have the time, would you mind reading over my script and giving me suggestions? It takes place in a comic book store, where two employees try to play God with the emotions of their customers. Just drop me a comment and I'll e-mail it to you.
Thanks!
